Date: 05/23/12 - 05:15 pm Title: Chapter 3- Welcome home Luci
I love this story so far. I think its so awesome how you live your story up in the middle. there's not a whole lot of people who do that. I love it. The only thing i would suggest is maybe adding a banner to attract more people, but thats about it :)
Ok!! :) Thank U!
Date: 05/12/12 - 07:51 pm Title: Chapter 2- Kidnapped
once again pretty unrealistic, i would not be that calm like bianca or as calm a Lucy
but i still like theplot :)
Bianca's parents are missing she's used to drama and Luci is pretty used to her dad being a jerk. oh and thank you!! :D
Date: 05/12/12 - 07:43 pm Title: Taken- Chapter 1
It was a little short to be honest but im sure this is just the intro to the story, some part were a little rushed and in realistic, but the grammar is reallly good and i like the plot of the story so far! i'm sure the next chapter is going to be really goood! i can't wait to read it!
-for your challenge btw