Date: 01/18/12 - 10:24 pm Title: I Feel Bad For You Son
This reminds me so much of anything by Ellen Hopkins. Have you read anything of hers? She's my favorite author, so that's a major compliment! Haha (:
Anyways, good story, I enjoyed it a lot!
No I haven't read anything by her but if she writes like this I'll definitely check her out! Thanks for the review! :)
Date: 01/18/12 - 07:49 pm Title: I Feel Bad For You Son
This was a really powerful story :o The way you wrote it was incredible and you have some serious talent there. It didn't end like I thought it would so that was a definite plus. The way you use certain words is amazing and your writing style is really great. The only thing I would pick on is when you write dialogue - you miss out on some commas and full stops at the end of each character's bit of talking. Eg. “Run” She stated. Between the 'Run' and talking mark should be a comma. Not to be too picky or anything (: Other than that, I loved it. Lovely job.
Thank you, you made me smile and thanks for the tip! I really appreciate it there's always room for improvement [:
Date: 01/18/12 - 07:24 pm Title: I Feel Bad For You Son
Oh my gosh. This is so interesting.... I've never read anything like it. And your writing is amazing, you have a unique way of describing things, it's almost like I'm watching it. I really think you should make it a story...
Why thank you I appreciate this.. So much...